About the work

A closer look.

You know the draft. The paragraph you have rewritten six times, where the room is described in careful detail and nobody in it wants anything yet. That is the line where a stranger stops reading, and you cannot see it from inside your own pages. Read my draft, and I tell you the truth about it. Send one piece and tell me who it is for. I read it whole, cold, as a stranger with no reason to be kind, then send back one page: the exact line that lost me, the reason, and a rewrite of the weakest passage so a reader keeps moving. Whatever words brought you here (critique my writing, edit my draft, feedback on my writing, a manuscript read before you send it out), it is the same one-page read. One revision included. Best up to about 3,000 words: an opening chapter, a pitch, a post, an application, a letter. If you only want a beta read, say so and I keep it to where a reader leaves. If the piece already does its job, I say so and tell you where the strength is. I do not invent problems to justify the fee. A sample in my register: "The opening is doing two jobs and neither one lands. Cut the cost from line one; let the light be wrong first. Then the price reads as a fact, not a plea."